Ohio Impromptu

A nice industrial area would be nice. Seriously though, if I get nothing but a few CDs and DVDs I'll be happy.

I'm quite sure I like this a lot, but I'm undecided on a few things. The constant use of the word 'word' ( :roll: ) is helpful in establishing what ...

Granted, but since I don't know what that is, your wish results in you dancing like a Kiwi for an extended period of time. I wish I could speak Spanish.

I think she means that it reads exactly like a standard novel, but the writing process is backwards. So basically, if you didn't know she wrote the ending first and ...

Splendid, to say the least. There was something about that first sentence that made the whole piece so simple - yet epic? I don't know. Still, you managed to capture ...

I think some of my characters might have problems with being named after the third assistant to the director of Kung Fu Hustle. Or, God help us, the lighting technician ...

Thanks for the input, Claudette. I must admit that this chapter is a rough draft thrown together in a few hours, so I apologize for any shortcomings. I'll definitely go ...

-In every drop of rain I wish had landed on me -On buses and trains where there is only time to think and stare out the window. -In darkness, where ...

That was nice. You crafted it perfectly so that we, as readers, can see that Amy is just in the narrators head, although you don't outright tell us until the ...

Weekend.

Overall, you have a solid prologue here. I actually quite enjoyed it. However, there were some things that are pretty insignificant, but need to be fixed anyway. Red is where ...

Splendid. You brought this faceless man to life - gave him a past, feelings, even to the point where we almost know him. I must admit that without the picture ...

Fight Club tells you how to make napalm, which fits perfectly. I guess if the info is relevant to the story and isn't like an infomercial that interrupts your viewing ...

Thankyou tremendously for the feedback. I agree with most of what you pointed out, so I'll fix those things up in a minute. As for the Rogues: yes, they are ...

I often have little inspiring quotes at the beginnings of my novel drafts, just to keep me going and remind me what its all about. Anyway, here is the first ...